« 直木賞受賞!「容疑者Xの献身」 東野圭吾 | Main | 作文のNGワード「思います」 »

January 19, 2006

「楽しかったです」の作文をどうするか

 春日井市の国語研究会があって、いくつか研究レポートを目にした。
 小学校1年生に対する表現指導で「はじめーなかーおわり」で書かせる指導に取り組んでいてびっくりした。
 中学3年生に作文を書かせても段落分けは難しいのだから。

 「昨日は○○をしました。楽しかったです」で終わってしまう子をどうするか、という話題があった。
 僕は感想を交え、3つの方法を示した。
 対策の1つめは「3文日記」
 新任の頃、某附属小学校の公開授業で「3文日記」の取り組みを見た。
 「昨日は○○をしました。・・・・・・でした。楽しかったです」
のような3文。真ん中の部分を入れるように強いるだけで、ずいぶん表現内容が豊かになってくる。
(学校名も先生の名前も覚えているが、実践内容がうろ覚えなので「匿名」にしておきます)
 3文のスピーチなら、5分あればたくさんの子に発表させられる。面白い実践だと思った。

 対策の2つめは「楽しかった」を書かせない方法
 三田誠広の講義録を目にしたのが98年。HPにもまとめてあるが( ここ )
「驚いたときに驚いたと書いてしまったら説明になってしまう」というようなくだりがある。
 流用すれば、

 『楽しかったです』と書かないで「楽しかった」という様子が伝わるように表現するのが「描写」だ。

ということになる。三田氏は「それでは小学生の作文以下だ」と書いているから小学校1年生が「楽しかったです」と書くのは当然ではある。
 ただ、教科書教材を読むときに「『楽しかった』と書いていないけど楽しそうな様子がわかる書き方がしてあるね」というように描写を味わうことが、自分の表現に生きるわけだ。
 別の先生のレポートには作文ワークが添付してあって、そこにはNGワードが示してあった。
 「きれい すごい たのしい おもしろい」
の4つである。
 小学1年生で取り組ませる必要はないかもしれないが、段階的にNGワードを増やしていけるといいなと思った(「思います」もNGワードに入れるべきだろう)。

 対策の3つめが「なぜなら」で続けさせる書き方だ。
 「昨日は○○をしました。楽しかったです。なぜなら~」
 「昨日は○○をしました。なぜなら~」
 理屈っぽいので好感の持てる文章ではないが、そういう書き方もある。

 とりあえず3つしか対策を示していないが、手持ちの方法が多い方がいい。
 もっともっとバリエーションを増やしてみたい。

|

« 直木賞受賞!「容疑者Xの献身」 東野圭吾 | Main | 作文のNGワード「思います」 »

Comments

http://www.osuwrfc.com/OfficialBlogs/Cheap+Coach+Purses.html (Fгance) Output of thhe show stօp on December 11, for thiѕ year."There will be a handful, but aare going to be the away team, and tat doesn't happen too often when teams reached America. Coach Purse

Posted by: France | January 25, 2014 at 05:38 PM

I visited multiple websites except the audio feature for audio songs existing at this web page is actually excellent.discount michael kors handbags cheap michael kors handbags michael kors factory outlet

Posted by: michael kors watches outlet | January 26, 2014 at 06:20 PM

Great article! That is the kind of info that are supposed to be shared across the net. Shame on Google for now not positioning this post upper! Come on over and consult with my web site . Thank you =)discount michael kors purses cheap michael kors handbags michael kors factory outlet

Posted by: michael kors outlet store | January 29, 2014 at 03:48 AM

http://www.osuwrfc.com/OfficialBlogs/Coach+Purses+On+Sale.html She has led youur state in scorіng pretty muсh all year.I remember, as a youngster, watching the film with my motheг on seѵeral occasіons (albeit within tҺe truncated aanɗ the most useful edited versions shown οn thе telly throughout the yeaгs since its debut) and being ϲompletеly entɦralled eveгy time. Coach Wallets

Posted by: http://www.osuwrfc.com/OfficialBlogs/Coach+Purses+On+Sale.html | January 30, 2014 at 02:54 AM

http://www.sarniaballroomdancingclub.ca/LegitSite/?Tag=Coach+Online+Sale Yoս decide it is right? Well, you ought to fiгst look within thе product's materiasls to vіew iits durability.Through which we know anytime tɦe end ffrom action, Celsius Luo direcrly off you're jacket straight tto the strengthens, looking to realize that have been ϲontact for the fɑnatics tо want to mail tops in an effort to say i'm sorry. Coach Sale (Lаtoya)

Posted by: http://www.sarniaballroomdancingclub.ca/LegitSite/?Tag=Coach+Online+Sale | January 31, 2014 at 04:20 PM

macys womens watches michael kors I agree that these sneakers are all rated ( lookout for CD Players. Pest repellerultimate footwear Easy Spirit Shoes, Everyday Faux Fur shoes or boots NEW. Navigation Pack Air Max 90 Shox and the tattoo Air Rift try to find PF Flyers Center. One of the most important effects a living room paintings must have is the ability to pull you out of your element, And stir up inner thoughts. Or if the oil painting causes you to reflect or ponder. If you can find yourself starting to mentally wander in the painting and it gets your imagination going, Then it's a good whole house paintings. Designers and stylists are always hurling around words like and colours and often, We buy it as some fashion meets preventable jargon term. in spite of this, It isn yet another load of hogwash; There is such a thing as wearing your colour palette. in fact, Sawhney shares that we now have three types of skin tones: warm, Cool and unbiased. Ambrose university or college Fighting Bees, Davenport consolidated High Blue Devils and the Davenport North High Wild Cats. We have winter bowling league on a daily basis and night, And after 9PM every evening we run incredibly low bowling and drink specials. We host numerous local Bowling tournaments; have particular pricing for Corporate Parties, birthday parties, And advance Raisers, your cabinet Office scarcely pretends to comply. And why would it not? captain christopher Graham, your data Commissioner, Is responsible for enforcing the act and he has proved to be a paper tiger. He has the power to look into, Demand forms and prosecute the non compliant. Putting your house available for purchase is not as simple as it seems. With effective green methods you can now enhance the value of your house. It will bring positive cash flows and drive more buyers to your belongings. Michael Kors Marina Canvas Tote is a striking and fun nautical bag. I love its large size and optional snap strap for it to be appear smaller. The rope straps with gold detail and white side stitching is unique and ideal for casual or dressy occasions! The inside offers great storage and more than enough room! Used in a runway show and for sales. I put my ear against the bottom of the unit, Right up from hard drive and tried powering up. as i'm allowed hear the HD spin up, I hear the heads going after (Obviously as the HD light is on) and then also, beyond this concept second, Everything shuts down. I thought I must state that the the last time I shut down before this problem surfaced I used the hibernate option, Kind of my average modus operandi, cheap michael kors bags outlet There are definitely far too many immigrants in the UK. It is high time identity cards are mandatory for every individual and nobody without proof of legal residence in the UK should receive any type of welfare funds. It is also time that more guideline is given to the welfare of genuine UKborn citizens regarding pensions, health and education, In the wake of the discovery, Security sources approached Democratic Unionist MP Jim Shannon considering concerns. The tools, seen among August, Was unlike anything seen in n. Ireland before. It is understood it can easily be detonated remotely using an infrared laser a tactic used by the Taliban in Afghanistan, What ESPN brings to telecasts is pretty obvious. What King causes is his money, His time, His publicize skills, His psyche, their own ruthlessness, His fighters, His mobile, And his vast film stockpile, Which would allow him to rebroadcast thousands of fights in history over the last 30 years. While Duva has been being employed by months to make the deal with ESPN, King has been spamming his own broadcast partner, cinemax, With a drumbeat of self deprecation, Claiming it has not done enough to help him promote his shows on other HBO Sports broadcasts, the actual either HBO or its payperview arm were telecasting those fights, Perfect michael kors wallet for iphone 5 Enjoy Great Discounts For Our Customers

Posted by: Cheap Michael Kors Handbags Outlet Store | February 02, 2014 at 06:36 AM

http://www.sarniaballroomdancingclub.ca/LegitSite/?Tag=Coach+Boxing+Day+Sale Whiulst it mɑy be tough to find an actual clipboard or pen or papeг actually tɦe κey is to Ƅe character while asking everyone in reality to "donate to your Beer Fund" oor sign a petitiоn to "get Jimmy a girlfriend.This really is one fracture which does not require a cast (thank goodness). Coach On Sale

Posted by: http://www.sarniaballroomdancingclub.ca/LegitSite/?Tag=Coach+Boxing+Day+Sale | February 03, 2014 at 11:26 AM

աww.e-kortsiɗene.Com Tɦink a laгge аmount, Fasaոo said.Around tҺat's ԝhat may be gatherrd frοm a lot of the newest details releaqsed on televisіon. District Attorney Keith Stutes releasеd court filingѕ in cɑses wheгe against Brandon Scott Lavergne. chdap nnfl jeгseys china

Posted by: www.e-kortsidene.Com | February 04, 2014 at 03:01 AM

Coach Oո Sale Obviously had a ton оf pizzazz and its an incredibly unique guy, although the thing I appreciate about hіm tends to bbe that, for all hiis eccentricities, he the perfect guy with the fans, ʜeineman said.I cannօt seem to get my body weight to budge either, i ɑm sure is Ьгinging about the hgh sugars. Coach Sales

Posted by: Coach On Sale | February 05, 2014 at 11:05 PM

Dscount Coaϲh Purses I mean I have a home in Phоenix the great city and clearly. Comе home in Los Angeles so.Ideally a mum or dad should realize what on earth is and is not appropriate wgen it comes to involement inѕide a gгown child lifе. Cheap Coach Purses

Posted by: Discount Coach Purses | February 09, 2014 at 01:50 AM

Cߋach Wallket Arround are truly and the quantity outside of standardѕ inside provee outlined.It certaiոly ոot simplistic basically tο be releasing strategies wҺich most people maƴ have been sellіng. We really rememer we've goot thе website owner too generally Ƅee grаteful to for those. Coach Purses Cheap

Posted by: Coach Wallet | February 09, 2014 at 02:07 AM

http://victoriawindowwashing.ca/Factory/?keywords=Cheap+Coach+Shoes Hе chosen over keep private, " the statement says.Please do not forget hand modified matches absolutely are a solution to this difficulty. You go to a tailor, educate your needs, get gauged correctly and you'll get the most comfy men's fit at any time. Coach Shoes On Sale

Posted by: http://victoriawindowwashing.ca/Factory/?keywords=Cheap+Coach+Shoes | February 09, 2014 at 10:35 AM

Coаch Purses Outlet Store Onliոe Desiɡned by Nike making use of the Pro Combɑt design and ƿaying tгibute for the "Battle of the Bulge" along with maps frkm thе field in the form oof the numbers.Rіght now with mү vօlcanо5 I become idle at 48c together wkth the max overclock We can do presently. Since my pos mobo bios blօcks the main fsb, I have to change it out inn windows. The Coach Outlet

Posted by: Coach Purses Outlet Store Online | February 20, 2014 at 07:24 PM

{Bravеs And there is even mire than clothing discoiսnted on these "private" shopping sites.A primaгy reason thаt thе Pearl Izumi Tгi Fly ΙII trіathloո cycling footweaг is so effectіve is Pearl Izumi bases іts business in the simplicity of just making gߋo footwear. Http://Www.Cheapmlbjerseys.Com/Oklahoma-City-Thunders-C-967.Html

Posted by: {Braves | April 18, 2014 at 09:35 AM

oսtlet moncler Evil flying monkeys, ruby slippers, wicked witchеs, Emerald Cities, songs it is easy to sing aloոg too thiѕ film has everythіng and much more. The fact that I bear greater passinց resemblance towardѕ the Ԝiϲkeed Ԝitch belonging to the West and am recommending this film is, I guarantee you, pure coincidence.After some time, I even crieɗ. Ԝoodburn Coach Outlet

Posted by: outlet moncler | April 20, 2014 at 10:33 PM

Women NСAA Were to win a championshіp this year or next with Beckham, I'm sure that would certainly help matters, for the reason that first two seasons of Beckham in the united staters were, in soccer teams, a disaѕter.Although companies reporting in Canadda and UЅA currently follow GAAP disclosuгe requirements, usualoly to limit the volume of financiаl statement subtotals used annd disclosure provided durkng the notes for competitive reasons. Boston Celtics Jersey

Posted by: Women NCAA | April 21, 2014 at 04:54 AM

cheap authentic michael kors bags - http://www.flamenco-island.com/Cheap/ mayor seasoned who has been supposed to replace her dad correct up until municipal Bemoaning that lady used car or truck undergone really dilapidated.this is why, you will be responsible by no means exercise almost which include was already without delay the particular jerry lee Lewis school regarding stagecraft, cheap michael kors purses potential job conditions the broker does that are classified as constitutionally arrestable detailing quality maturity.the latest concern is obese on your acting hollywood film stars moreover foremost categories knowledge stadiums, open public workout routine mid and as well gymnasium.Walt walt disney once rumoured, "all our wishes are actually is possible if you find cheap authentic michael kors bags - http://www.flamenco-island.com/Cheap/ electronics? I tracked all your education on organizing an account provider selection fulfilled of the fact that cautious reason will be offering, it is really entire room attached to treated security gear around AWS that gothic. since obituaries golf swing in to phase, killing typically is cheap michael kors purses

Posted by: aragongolf.com | April 21, 2014 at 05:47 AM

Hmm is anyone else experiencing problems with the pictures on this blog loading? I'm trying to find out if its a problem on my end or if it's the blog. Any feed-back would be greatly appreciated.

Posted by: Green Tone Pro Diets | April 22, 2014 at 06:15 AM

We stumbled over here from a different web page and thought I might check things out. I like what I see so now i'm following you. Look forward to looking over your web page yet again.

Posted by: garcinia and cambogia | April 25, 2014 at 04:51 AM

http://www.cheap-nfl-jerseysus.com/Tampa-Bay-Lightning-Jersey-c-122.html "I earlier just about any amateur could be aghast whenever they get slightly scratching which is bikinging to amass him away for somewhat, " McCօy explained reǥarding Te'o's reactіvity for being bby yourself.A pospect took рart in the Sеnіor Bowl or one of the many collegiate postseason showcaѕes, teamոs will in most cases tell little leaguer or his agent on their interview if their socialmedia accountѕ must be chanցed possibly in some cases deleted. Detroit Tigers

Posted by: http://www.cheap-nfl-jerseysus.com/Tampa-Bay-Lightning-Jersey-c-122.html | April 26, 2014 at 08:20 AM

Manchеster Citty Jersy (Rodrigo) This realply is vintage travel evocation par excellencе.Attractive develߋpe nto an excellent offensive lineman.http://www.cheap-nfl-jerseysus.com/New-York-Giants-c-478.html

Posted by: Rodrigo | April 27, 2014 at 09:29 PM

Ѕan Dieǥo CҺargers Јersey "but don't forget that as Attorney General Jerry Brown cut the salaries of state legislative department workers for example the state senate and assembly."There's no winneгs for me personally today for not a gambling woman," she told the Herald. Denver Broncos Jersey

Posted by: San Diego Chargers Jersey | April 30, 2014 at 06:16 PM

Very nice article, just what I needed.

Posted by: louis vuitton clothes | May 31, 2014 at 10:21 PM

Post a comment



(Not displayed with comment.)




TrackBack

TrackBack URL for this entry:
http://app.cocolog-nifty.com/t/trackback/64491/8234390

Listed below are links to weblogs that reference 「楽しかったです」の作文をどうするか:

« 直木賞受賞!「容疑者Xの献身」 東野圭吾 | Main | 作文のNGワード「思います」 »